Peer Review (20303 Kim Gaeun)

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
4점, 흥미로운 주제

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
글을 좀더 강화했으면 좋겠다는 생각이 든다.
Thesis
What is the thesis?
the Internet real-name system is an appropriate tool to solve the social problems in cyber space.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
con의 입장


Any other thoughts?
신선한 주제는 아니지만 글 내용이 기대된다.


Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
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Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
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Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
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Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
좀더 내용 풍부하게해줬으면 좋겠지만, 이과니까 정시 파이팅 ㅋㅋ

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
동의

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
동의

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?


How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
내용을 좀더 풍부하게!

Research
Is the author using research effectively?
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Is the research from appropriate sources?
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Are the sources obvious?
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Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
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Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
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