Peer Review (20302 Gwak SangHun)

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
5점. 흥미로운 의견과 생각 그리고 논리, 괜찮은 것 같음.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
어법적 요소를 체크해주고 의견을 좀더 강하게 뒷받침 할 수 있도록 만든다면 충분할 것 같음.


Thesis
What is the thesis?
We can protect ourselves from the criminals by admitting that they are same with us

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
저는 con의 입장에서 썼을 것 같습니다.

Any other thoughts?
신선한 주제, 글 내용이 궁금해지게 만든다.


Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
초입부터 뭔가 너무 확 깊이 들어간다는 느낌? 완급조절이 있다면 좋을 것 같음. 그외에는 괜찮음

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
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Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
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Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
완급조절

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
동의하지 않음

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
동의
If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
논리가 괜찮은 듯 전체적으로

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
어법요소 체크



Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
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Is the research from appropriate sources?
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Are the sources obvious?
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Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
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Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
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